Jordan PowellWTVF, Nashville "Nashville's Notebook"Judges Comments
- I love this story! Great open sequence with the sprinkler. Main character is a total soundbite gold mine. Excellent reveal with his wife and some very touching moments...especially the singing part. So sweet. Your shooting was mostly really good but you had a couple shots that were really sloppy. Clean those up and you have a perfect story here. Nice job! thought some of the sequences on the golf course were a little choppy and we went back to the same two shot multiple times in the nursing home, alos didnt like once he got to the nursing home you immediatly jumped back outside with another establishing shot--- but the story structure, reveals, tights, nats--- kick ass! - Great Character, great pace, great nats, a few more cutaways and shots around the nursing home could have helped in a couple spots there with some siliar shots. Great story- - Great story. Had some wonky off level shots when he was golfing. Great shooting when they were together...simple. Sometimes the simple way is the best way, and you even still had those great reflection shots from his glasses. Love it. - Awesome story! great character, I love the front end build up and then when the story turned and got serious his character development on the front end really sold it. Its hard not to love that guy. especially with all his little comments and jokes. the paralel park was also very good. thought you could have buttoned the story up, follow him home give it a third act. beginning, middle, end, needed an end--- didnt love the opening sequence-- no face shots early, would have liked to meet this foresome sooner. when you are introducing the golfers we have no handshake shots with them--- I hear them but I dont see them. - great story, great character. some great sequences to take us through the story. great reveal with the wife. once you got into the nursing home, you went back outside to an establishing shot, I didnt like that. stay inside. lots of shake but overall great emotion and moments. - this is storytelling--- the golf sequencing was amazing then that reveal! Damn. Tears. the shot the touching face shot was a great moment--- great setup, great moments.
Andrew KonkleWITI, Milwaukee "Close Your Eyes and Aim"Judges Comments
- Bravo! Awesome storytelling here. Nice reveal on the pumpkin drop. Way to use that go pro! You had so many creative ways of using it! Awesome moments. I liked the one when the chick was a all Yes! Fun fun story to watch. Great teamwork with your reporter. really liked it, great moment with the dude dropping the gopro in his pumpkin, great build with him and then awesome payoff--- his focus face is great... good pacing, good writing--- really nice - Good Story, the audio needed to be mixed better. the zip line audio seemed a little hot at times. The interviews also seemed a little low in spots- Wide Wide Wide--- the only wide shot we had had a flower in focus in the forground, we need perspective. Help set up the scene. - Fun, fun story. Loved the reveal of sorts when we realize the GoPro’s on the pumpkin. Fun nats and shot variety. - Fun story, cool subject and lots of shot variety, nice use of the gopro but you went back to the same shot too many times. wanted a wide shot of someone throwing a pumpkin. the dude holding the gopro in his pumpkin was great--- - i appreciate that you didnt go too crazy with the gopro. they were meaningful and added to the story. and also some great compelling moments. nice job breaking up the reporter track with the zipline nats. nice job editing the quick handheld shots. great use of gopro i love the pumpkin in the gopro-- the writing matched his facial expression. the wide shot was nice the go pro in the target was good. the writing was cliche but still a nice story. - nice reveal that it was a pumpkin drop--I like the dude with the focus on the gopro shot-- you could have maybe focused the story around a guy like that to have a strong character--- very well done
Stephen ClapperWTVF, Nashville "Life-saving Snapshots"Judges Comments
- Nice job on this one! Editing is fantastic. Good talkative main character. Nice moments when shes doing her work. Maybe try and get a different angle on her interview? Also maybe ask more questions while she's working? Overall excellent work. - nice shots, nice pace on the edit--- good character, you could have set her story up more--- get her out taking photos from her normal life or business and then reveal that she does this as well, get into why... I assume she does this because she is an animal lover--- show me that emotion, get into her bigger reasons of why... visually strong shooting--- but the story needs to start in a better place and go to a better place narratively - great opening sequence. lots of nice closeups--- good nats. try to find someone who adopted a pet and hear from them. everything was great but the interview shots needed to be mixed up, we kept seeing the same shot there. the closing shot needed to have her walking away from the camera instead of toward it. - really enjoyed this one. I like how you finally gave us a look at her finished product. nice pacing throughout and some really nice crisp nats. Good moments throughout, small suggestion to just switch up her interview shot between questions.
Chance HornerWFAA, Dallas "Christmas in November"Judges Comments
- nice reveal that it was a pumpkin drop--I like the dude with the focus on the gopro shot-- you could have maybe focused the story around a guy like that to have a strong character--- very well done - really nice job on this. Heart breaking story here and told very well. You let things breathe, Bravo. Ending was great as you captured a great moment with the mom saying I love you. Nice! I liked it, you had good moments--- thought you could have done a little more with the neigbors setting up after the reveal just to keep that theme going a little further--- really nice. - Well Done, loved the pacing some of the shots in the beginning could have been better, a few just seemed wallpapery. Need some creative angles, just essentially prettier pictures. - Great use of silence. You let those moments sit and breathe and it made all the differnce. Nice progression of time throughout. - Nice story. Nice shooting. I wanted something to transition to the cancer reveal --- a line, a shot, something. Good job hanging onto woman's SOT and letting it breathe. - Nice job. I like that you guys stuck with the story through the end. Lots of powerful bites. On a 2 shot interview move your camera more to the side so its more of a profile shot of them both. Add more depth and dont shoot them head on. Nice job letting the sot from the wife breath. avoid the see saw effect of the lights on the house and the snowman, work with the reporter to retrack that section. - you stuck this one out until the very end, and it payed off. very nice reveal and waiting around for the carolers was a great moment. I like how you held the shot on her as she teared up. Great story. the reveal was perfect I loved the silence you used in the pkg. I thought the I love you font worked as well. you went back at night which showed a great commitment to wrapping up the story.